A4: Excessive Subordination
A4: Excessive Coordination or Subordination: To improve clarity, break sentences with too many clauses into multiple independent sentences.
Excessive coordination and subordination:
A headache can be a stressful and painful part of anyone’s day, but Aspirin makes things better, so I went down to the store where I found myself some aspirin, which I was extremely relieved about because I knew I couldn’t take the pain for more than a few hours unless I got some sleep.
Fixed:
A headache can be a stressful and painful part of anyone’s day. Aspirin makes things better, so I went down to the store. There I found myself some aspirin. I was extremely relieved to see the store carried aspirin, because I knew I couldn’t take the pain for more than a few hours unless I got some sleep. (Spoon-feed your reader)